My First Poem is about my good friend Kelly Phillips who got into a car accident last friday and passed away. She will always be in my heart, i'll never forget her. A senior that mattered.
Dear Kelly Phillips
I'm sorry this had to happen
I'm sorry that it was you
I'm sorry that you got in that car
I'm sorry for Kylie too
I'm sorry you weren't wearing a seatbelt
I'm sorry the convertible flipped
I'm sorry that i could do nothing
You will be greatly missed
So i pray for all your doctors
The police and ambulance, too
I pray especially for your family
And all the people who loved you
But the promise of God tells us
That this is not the end
Your soul lives on in all of us
And someday we'll see you again
Kelly, you've touched our hearts
You're an inspiration to everyone
We were lucky to have known you
And i thank God your suffering is done.
My second poem is a little lighter, its a happy poem about Cabo where i went with my best friend emily last spring break.
My Beautiful Place
Waves crashing,
Sun shining,
This vacation is going to be fun.
Friends laughing,
Music playing,
The fun has only just begun.
Parasailing,
Salsa dancing,
I don;t want the night to be done.
Massages relaxing,
Now we're tanning,
I love this hot mexican sun.
Next year returning,
Patiently waiting,
Back to Cabo San Lucas I'll run.
4 comments:
i like the the first poem and how you express your feelings i think its about someone who died. ' and someday we'll see you again'
that line is about you hoping that you will want and wish to see this person again. "Your sould lives on in all of us" i think you meant "your soul" other than that this poems really good. out of the two poems i like the 'Dear Kelly Philips' i like the choice of words and how they are put together. Niiiice Mackenzie!
I love both of your poems. The first one is really touching and filled with emotion which I thing helps translate the idea behind the poem. I also thought that is moved really smoothly. It transitioned really well and that made it that much more interesting to read! I also liked the second one because it is fun! I could also relate to it which made it more interesting for me to read. Keep up the awesome poem writing!
wow that poem was beautiful..im sorry about your loss.. its hard losing someone you love...but she would be proud of that poem its realy touching to the heart...i felt what you were feeling......fabo job......
i love both poem but especially the first one it is very touching. i liked how it came alive. The peom explains everything for its self you can tell it talkes about someone that died driving a car. it sounded like you were talking to her straight up. I have nothing to say about the changing of the poem. while i was reading it i can feel what you where feeling its wonderful mackenzie., great job
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